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pero el lineart es mio XD no del sevilla (ojala fuera porque quisiera colorear algo de el algun dia XD)
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First of all, I really love how you've chosen to colour her hair here, and the shading on her leg especially is perfect. It has just the right amount of reflection from the stone floor below. Also, on the subject of colours, the saturation between the highlight and the shade of the wing that she has looks incredible. It's easily one of my favorite aspects of this image.
However, since this is a critique, what I will say is that her head is perhaps pushed a bit too far forward when looking towards the back of her neck as I am now. Other than that though, I seriously can't fault the anatomy!
One more thing, is that her left eye could perhaps use a tiny bit more shading around the top of the iris to bring some more contrast to that area, but that's such a tiny thing that I wouldn't worry about it too much if I were you.
All in all, I still think this is a gorgeous picture 1 year on, and your technique has only strengthened since then! :'D (this being the reason I didn't give a full 5 stars in that area now - although you have been improving on what looks to me like perfection~!
COMPOSITION
The figure is not really benefited by the wide border on the right side of the image. Maybe you did that to allow room for the floating shrapnel/splinters, but cutting those off partway would have probably been better for the composition. If you have concerns about centering a character and how that's typically bad in a finished piece, you could extend the image more on the right side, or crop the image close near the hand and head on the left.
ANATOMY
It's really great that you attempted to render the thigh muscles, but the muscle you've depicted as winding over the top (vastus internus) doesn't wrap so far up around the top of the thigh. It comes off as a somewhat unshapely bulge. The muscle that does bulge from the top of the thigh protrudes slightly farther up the leg, and doesn't wrap (the rectus femoris). Perhaps this is the boots, but the calves look as if you did not pay much attention to their structure.
THOSE DARNED BOOTS
I'm not going to be harsh, haha. Just know that the issue is the foot's lack of structure, and then the boot's corresponding lack of structure. Don't forget about the arch of the foot, etc.
Good luck!
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